The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar and line charts below reveal the mean monthly
temperature
and washing out vesture wholesale in New York for the first half period of the year in 2012.
Overall
, the trend of
temperature
during the period was upward and the highest recorded
temperature
occurred in June,
however
, the highest number of requests for bathing suits was recorded in April.
It is clear that
temperature
in the first half of the year experienced an upward tendency,
overall
. In the first month, the
temperature
was just over 30 Fahrenheit (F) and
then
experienced a minor reduction and reached exactly 30 F, in February.
Then
, the
temperature
gradient rose and
finally
, reached approximately 65 F in June. Revenue from washing-out suit sales saw an upward tendency from January until April and
then
the recorded amount of profit-making had a downward trend. The washing-out suit sales touched the highest amount in April just under 300 hundred thousand dollars (HTD) and the lowest amount was recorded in June.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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