The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar and line charts below reveal the mean monthly

temperature

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and washing out vesture wholesale in New York for the first half period of the year in 2012.

Overall

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, the trend of

temperature

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during the period was upward and the highest recorded

temperature

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occurred in June,

however

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, the highest number of requests for bathing suits was recorded in April.

It is clear that

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temperature

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in the first half of the year experienced an upward tendency,

overall

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. In the first month, the

temperature

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was just over 30 Fahrenheit (F) and

then

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experienced a minor reduction and reached exactly 30 F, in February.

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, the

temperature

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gradient rose and

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, reached approximately 65 F in June. Revenue from washing-out suit sales saw an upward tendency from January until April and

then

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the recorded amount of profit-making had a downward trend. The washing-out suit sales touched the highest amount in April just under 300 hundred thousand dollars (HTD) and the lowest amount was recorded in June.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

average monthly temperatures
bathing suit sales
correlation
monthly breakdown
significant changes
warmest months
speculate
trends
increase in temperature
contrasting
predictive speculation
general trends
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