The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph delineates information about the average monthly
temperature
in New York in 6
months
in 2012.
In addition
, the bar chart gives data about the total amount of
money
received on bathing suit sales in
this
city over the period.
Overall
, the average
temperature
witnessed an upward trend in 6
months
until reaching its peak in the
last
surveyed month.
By contrast
, the total
money
from selling bathing suits bucked the trend,
however
, it was reported that the amount of
money
from these sales was the highest in April. More specifically, in January, New York was reported to have an average
temperature
of over 30 Fahrenheit before dropping slightly to 30 Fahrenheit in the next month. Over the next 5
months
, the average monthly
temperature
fluctuated with an increase before peaking at roughly 65 Fahrenheit in the
last
month. Regarding the remaining features, in January, the total amount of
money
received on bathing suit sales was 100$,
this
number rose nearly threefold in the next 3
months
before dropping significantly in the
last
2
months
of the period
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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