The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most

 popular countries for UK residents to visit.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The presented graphs depict the data about
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the trip
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trip
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trips
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from and to
UK
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the UK
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,
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and about the most visitable
countries
for
UK
dwellers
. As is observed from the given data, it is evident that both the visits abroad by
UK
residents and the visits to the
UK
by overseas community members witnessed an upward trend respectively;
however
, abroad
trip
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trips
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that
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done by
UK
dwellers
saw the most significant rate.
Additionally
, in stark contrast to Turkey, France displayed a completely different trend, becoming the most popular country
that
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visited by
UK
residents. Commencing in 1979, the rate of foreign residents visiting the
UK
,
standing
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stood
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at 10
millions
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million
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people and
increasing
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increased
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gradually within the following years
which
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reached a peak of just under 30
millions
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million
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in 1999.
Likewise
, the number of
UK
dwellers
who visited foreign
countries
saw an increase, starting at just above 10
millions
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million
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and
inclined
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increased
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in 1984 as their rate amounted to 20
millions
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million
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before skyrocketing
at
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a little more than 50
million
. The bar chart presents the 5
favorites
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countries
visited by
UK
dwellers
.
While
Spain and France saw the two most visitable
countries
as their rates amounted to nearly 9
million
and a little more than 10
million
respectively, Greece and Turkey witnessed the 2 least popular among the 5
countries
which both of them visited by less than 5
million
UK
visitors.
Additionally
,
USA
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the USA
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had a moderate number of
UK
visitors, accounting for just around 4
millions
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million
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visitors.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, countries, dwellers, millions, million with synonyms.
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