The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most

 popular countries for UK residents to visit.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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The presented graphs depict the data about
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the trip
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trip
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trips
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from and to
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UK
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the UK
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,
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and about the most visitable
countries
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for
UK
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dwellers
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. As is observed from the given data, it is evident that both the visits abroad by
UK
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residents and the visits to the
UK
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by overseas community members witnessed an upward trend respectively;
however
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, abroad
trip
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that
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done by
UK
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dwellers
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saw the most significant rate.
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, in stark contrast to Turkey, France displayed a completely different trend, becoming the most popular country
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visited by
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residents. Commencing in 1979, the rate of foreign residents visiting the
UK
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,
standing
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stood
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at 10
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millions
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million
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people and
increasing
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gradually within the following years
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reached a peak of just under 30
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millions
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in 1999.
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, the number of
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dwellers
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who visited foreign
countries
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saw an increase, starting at just above 10
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millions
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million
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and
inclined
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increased
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in 1984 as their rate amounted to 20
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millions
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million
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before skyrocketing
at
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a little more than 50
million
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. The bar chart presents the 5
favorites
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countries
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visited by
UK
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dwellers
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.
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Spain and France saw the two most visitable
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as their rates amounted to nearly 9
million
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and a little more than 10
million
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respectively, Greece and Turkey witnessed the 2 least popular among the 5
countries
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which both of them visited by less than 5
million
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UK
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visitors.
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,
USA
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the USA
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had a moderate number of
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visitors, accounting for just around 4
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millions
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million
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visitors.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, countries, dwellers, millions, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "a little more than" was used 2 times.
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