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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the
percentage
 of
water
 consumption for different purposes
among
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 six areas of the world.
Overall
, it can be seen that
percentage
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the percentage
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 of agricultural
water
usage
 accounts
the
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for the
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 largest section in six areas.
In
contrast
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 Europe accounts
the
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 smallest section which is 32%
in
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of
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 agricultural
water
usage
.
To begin
 with, South East Asia used 7%
for
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of
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 domestic which is equivalent to
domestic
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the domestic
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water
usage
 of Central Asia.
Furthermore
, for domestic
usage
,
water
 consumption
of
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in
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 South America is the highest
percentage
that is
 19% and
other
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the other
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 three areas account
13
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%, 15%, and 9% respectively. For industrial
water
usage
, Central Asia shows the
least
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lowest
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percentage
 which is 5% and it is less than Africa and South America by 2% and 5%.
In addition
, North America and Europe hold the highest
percentage
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percentages
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 which are 48% and 53%
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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