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An international company is offering a temporary job for work experience, write a letter to apply for that job. You need to explain -where did you find this information -why you want to apply this job -what qualification you have -what position you want to apply

#company #job #work #-where #information #-why #-what #qualification #position
Dear Sir, I am Jacob, a resident of Brisbane colony, Australia. I am writing
this
 letter to apply for the contractual post of
Data
 Base Manager at your NewEra company in Surrey. First of all, I got
this
job
 information from the
Linkdin
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LinkedIn
 website where I have a profile with the name @jacob007. Though it was in the section of temporary jobs with $25 per hour, I would love to express my consent for
this
job
. The prominent reason behind joining
this
job
 is because I will be in Surrey for six months from July 14th onwards and the joining date mentioned in the post is 20th July.
In addition
 to
this
, I find myself the most suitable candidate for
this
job
 as I have an open work permit for six
month
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months
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 and the duration of
this
job
 is four months.
Further
, let me apprise you
with
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of
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 my academic details for
this
job
. I have completed my
master
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master's
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 degree in database and management systems
along with
 three years of experience in Microsoft Company's head branch in my country. I can handle any kind of
the
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apply
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data
 error,
data
 recovery and
data
 encryption task easily.
This
 is why, from 15 temporary posts, I request you to consider me for the post of
Data
 Base Manager. I ensure you
to
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I to
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 perform my cent per cent if you
would
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apply
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select me for
this
 position. Yours faithfully, Jacob Brown.
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Spelling
Consider checking the name of the platform 'Linkdin'. The correct spelling is 'LinkedIn'.
Accuracy
Be cautious about place names. Consider verifying 'Brisbane colony, Australia' to ensure it accurately represents your location and maintains the professional tone of your letter.
Tone
Maintain professionalism by avoiding casual language such as 'I find myself the most suitable candidate' which could be rephrased more formally.
Consistency
Ensure accuracy in your writing by reviewing 'I have an open work permit for six month and the duration of this job is four months.' for consistency in numeric and written numbers (months).
Structure
Structured paragraphs, each focusing on a specific topic, enhances readability and coherence.
Introduction/Conclusion
Clear and concise introduction and conclusion, providing a strong beginning and proper closure to the letter.
Content Relevance
Specific details about qualifications and experience directly address the job requirements, effectively supporting your application.

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