The pie charts below show unit of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

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The given pie charts illustrate the variation in the volume of

electricity

production

by utilizing various fuel sources in two particular countries Australia and France in 1980 and in 2000.

Whereas

, the latter pie charts depict the same in France in a simi time period. In 1980, the total

production

electricity

by leveraging various fuel sources in Australia

Wrong verb form

was

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100

units

However

, in 2000 it showed a dramatic rise by generating 170

units

. Two decades earlier from the year 2000, coal was the main source of

electricity

production

and half of the

electricity

was fabricated from coal.

Moreover

, the contribution of coal dramatically increased to 130

units

after two decades. In 1980, the fuel source, natural gas and hydropower took their place in

production

with similar inputs which is 20

units

Additionally

, the influence of hydropower in the year 2000 is spectacularly raised to 36

units

While

the input of natural gas

is fluctuated

Change to the active voice

fluctuates

has fluctuated

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to 2

units

. Nuclear power was not employed in Australia as a source for producing

electricity

On the contrary

, in France, The use of nuclear power significantly increased to 126

units

in 2000.

However

, before 20 years it generated just 15

units

in a particular area. Both natural gas and coal together produced half of the

electricity

in 1980.

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The pie charts below show unit of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

Heathcare and education are two important aspects of a nation and its population. Therefore, some people suggest that education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government.

Some parents and employers accuse schools of teaching "irrelevant" subjects such as History and Art. Do you agree that students should only learn important, job-related subjects?

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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