The pie charts below show unit of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

The pie charts below show unit of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000
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The given pie charts illustrate the variation in the volume of
electricity
production
by utilizing various fuel sources in two particular countries Australia and France in 1980 and in 2000.
Whereas
, the latter pie charts depict the same in France in a simi time period. In 1980, the total
production
of
electricity
by leveraging various fuel sources in Australia
is
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100
units
.
However
, in 2000 it showed a dramatic rise by generating 170
units
. Two decades earlier from the year 2000, coal was the main source of
electricity
production
and half of the
electricity
was fabricated from coal.
Moreover
, the contribution of coal dramatically increased to 130
units
after two decades. In 1980, the fuel source, natural gas and hydropower took their place in
production
with similar inputs which is 20
units
.
Additionally
, the influence of hydropower in the year 2000 is spectacularly raised to 36
units
.
While
the input of natural gas
is fluctuated
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to 2
units
. Nuclear power was not employed in Australia as a source for producing
electricity
.
On the contrary
, in France, The use of nuclear power significantly increased to 126
units
in 2000.
However
, before 20 years it generated just 15
units
in a particular area. Both natural gas and coal together produced half of the
electricity
in 1980.
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