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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 table illustrates the
number
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 of commuter employment in four different states in 2003 and 2006 and the rate of
people
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work
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 per 1000
people
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 in 2006. In general, the
number
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 of commuter
workers
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 in four countries from different continents increased in 2006 compared to 2003. Almost 600
thousand
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people
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 who worked in the USA in 2003 were temporary migrant
workers
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.
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number
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 was the highest among
three
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the three
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 others. Meanwhile, New Zealand
was
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only accounted for 65
thousand
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 in that year. Australia and the United Kingdom had a slightly different rate of
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migrant employees, around 15
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 more
people
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 lived in Australia.
This
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 same pattern occurred in 2006
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 the USA still became the first place
of
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for
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 commuter
workers
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 to live. But, in 2006 the
number
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 of those
workers
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 in Australia had been overtaken by the UK, which
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accounted for 266
thousand
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people
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. Meanwhile, per 1000
people
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 in New Zealand there were about 21
people
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 who worked as temporary migrant
workers
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 which was quite high.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, workers, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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