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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 table illustrates the
number
 of commuter employment in four different states in 2003 and 2006 and the rate of
people
work
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 per 1000
people
 in 2006. In general, the
number
 of commuter
workers
 in four countries from different continents increased in 2006 compared to 2003. Almost 600
thousand
people
 who worked in the USA in 2003 were temporary migrant
workers
.
This
number
 was the highest among
three
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the three
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 others. Meanwhile, New Zealand
was
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only accounted for 65
thousand
 in that year. Australia and the United Kingdom had a slightly different rate of
that
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migrant employees, around 15
thousand
 more
people
 lived in Australia.
This
 same pattern occurred in 2006
while
 the USA still became the first place
of
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for
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 commuter
workers
 to live. But, in 2006 the
number
 of those
workers
 in Australia had been overtaken by the UK, which
was
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accounted for 266
thousand
people
. Meanwhile, per 1000
people
 in New Zealand there were about 21
people
 who worked as temporary migrant
workers
 which was quite high.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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