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A significant change in education has led students around the world to obtain knowledge, either in the theoretical or the practical field

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A significant change in education has led
students
 around the world to obtain knowledge, either in the theoretical or the practical field. Generally speaking, many universities in the world have provided a good system
in
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 education with
a
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 purpose
to improve
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 the quality of education offered to their
students
. To make a good system to be more implemented, universities commonly give
students
the a
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the
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 time to gain experience in the practical field. The opportunity could be a program with the aim to encourage
students
in applying
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to apply
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 their theoretical knowledge in practice. The need for
a
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better progress for today and the future is one of the reasons many
students
 are looking for well-known companies to do an
internship
. There are many efforts that must be
done
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 to get a good place to work.
Students
 face daunting processes from the first step
determining
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 companies. There are many steps that they must be dealing with the selection process, it could be a long process of recruitment. The situation that
students
 face will be more complicated when they must deal with the visa procedures in
the
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 country of destination. The situation above is often experienced by
students
 who are willing to do
internship
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an internship
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 abroad. As the impact, the situation
is
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 successfully created demands on providing the service to those
students
. Many
internship
 business providers were established to help and solve
a
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 long process of
internship
 placement. The company has the sole purpose of providing a good placement for international and local
students
.
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Your essay effectively demonstrates a good understanding of the topic through the discussion of the importance of practical experience in education.
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The essay is well-structured, with a logical flow of ideas from the discussion of educational systems to the challenges students face in seeking internships abroad.
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You have clearly identified the need for support services for students seeking internships, showing good insight into the consequences of the educational changes discussed.

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