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ou have seen an advertisement from a couple who live in an Australia. For someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter the couple, in your letter: explain why you think you would be suitable the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

#ou #advertisement #couple #australia #someone #two #children #language #year #job
Dear Sir or Madam, Greeting, I hope
this
 letter finds you well, I am writing to you with regard to the advertisement for a private Arabic language tutor. I would like to express my interest in applying for
this
 job.
Firstly
, I have a bachelor's degree in
Arabic
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the Arabic
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 language,
in addition
, I have been working as a teacher for
past
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the past
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 five years,
therefore
 I believe that my qualifications will meet your expectations.
Besides
, I have many social skills courses which qualify me to deal with
children
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children's
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 problems
such
 as desirable manners and ways of how to raise youth with great values.
Lastly
, I need
this
 job as I
am
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have been
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 seeking
a
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apply
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part-time work recently,
although
 I can work a
full time
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 job in my career here, I want to gain more experience by studying more courses. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, John Omar.
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Greeting
Consider starting with 'Dear Sir/Madam,' for a more formal approach to match the job application context.
Detail
Expand on your teaching experiences with specific examples that showcase your skills and achievements.
Detail
Include more personalized reasons for wanting the job to make your application stand out.
Grammar
Check the use of commas and other punctuation marks for better clarity in your writing.
Detail
Consider offering a brief overview of your proposed teaching method or how you plan to engage the children in learning Arabic.
Content
You clearly stated your qualifications and experience, making a strong case for your suitability.
Structure
You managed to keep the letter well-organized with clear paragraphs for each point.
Tone
Your closing statement is polite and shows eagerness, which is appropriate for such letters.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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