The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The bar charts illustrate the number of graduates and postgraduates who attend part-time jobs, voluntary careers,
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studies and unemployment after finishing college in the United Kingdom in 2008.
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it is clear that
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both graduate and postgraduate students decide to
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their studies.
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, they are not interested in being a volunteer. On the one hand, in the year 2008, there were 29665 graduates in Great Britain who went to
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study. The number of learners doing part-time and unemployment registered 17735 and 16235 respectively,
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it was more than students who worked as a volunteer nearly five times which was at 3500.
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study of the UK postgraduates in 2008 remained in
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first place with 2725, followed by
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full-time
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which the gap between the first place and second place was about 200.
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, unemployment and voluntary work of postgraduates were ten times less than graduates.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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