The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India
The pie chart below illustrates the percentage of
food
consumption
such
as processed food
,vegetables and fruits,animal food
,nuts, and seeds in the world
in 2008 compared to two countries, China and India
.
Overall
, it is clear that
processed food
is the leading consumption
in both countries and the world
. The less popular is nuts and seeds, which don't consist of even one-fifth part.
On the one hand, the consumption
of food
as
nuts and seeds was lower in the Correct quantifier usage
such as
world
than in China and India
, which consisted of four percentages
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vegetables and fruits provided somewhat one-third dietary requirements of Add a comma
Also,
the
Chinese citizens and precisely 23 Correct article usage
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percentages
of Indians. The Replace the word
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world
average for fruit and vegetable consumption
was just below 30 percent
.
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Furthermore
, animal food
is the second popular
Correct quantifier usage
most popular
consumption
in India
, which is 27 persentages
. At the same time Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
the
animal Correct article usage
apply
food
consumption
in the world
consists of one percent
lower than in Change the spelling
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India
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