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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates the average weekly spending of families on
food
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, housing,
fuel
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 and
power
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, clothing and footwear, household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transport and
leisure
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 in one country in 2 different
years
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.
Overall
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, it can be observed that families spent the largest part of their
income
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 on
food
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 in 1968 and after 50
years
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 it changed to
leisure
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. People spent a small amount of money on
fuel
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 and
power
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 in 1968 and it was almost stable after
years
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.
According to
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 the data, the two highest amounts of spending in 1968 were for
food
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, which was 35% of weekly
income
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 and for housing, clothing and footwear which was 10%. The least spending in that year was on
fuel
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 and
power
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, which was only a little bit more than 5% and it was spent between 5-10% of weekly
income
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 on other consumptions like household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transport and
leisure
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. There were big changes in spending on
leisure
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, housing and
food
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 after 50
years
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.
Food
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 consumption decreased twice and only around 15% was spent on it,
whereas
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 spending money on
leisure
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 increased twice and more than 20% was spent on it by families. Spending on housing rose to approximately 20% of weekly
income
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 from 10%. There was a small change in spending on transportation, it
also
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 rose to around 15%.
In contrast
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, other spending like personal
goods
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,
fuel
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 and
power
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, clothing and footwear reduced in 2018 and showed up to 5% of
income
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. It should be mentioned, that household
goods
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 remained stable and showed between 5-10% of
income
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 in both
years
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, fuel, power, goods, leisure, years, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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