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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the portion of movies released and ticket
sales
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 as a total
percentage
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 in 1996 and 2006 in a certain nation. In general, for both periods, the
percentage
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 of movies released has decreased gradually almost in all genres, including
drama
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,
comedy
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, and fantasy.
In contrast
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, those genres produced high ticket
sales
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 with a consistent increase from 1996 to 2006. Look into detail, the
genre
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 that became people's favorite back in 1996 was
comedy
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 because it had the highest rate of ticket
sales
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 which reached 20
percent
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 and later rose to 23
percent
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 in 2006. Below the
comedy
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genre
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, there was
drama
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genre
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 which accounted for 15
percent
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 of total
sales
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 in 1996 and increased slightly in 2006. The fantasy one has experienced sharp growth in
sales
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 for ten years, about three times higher than in 1996. Meanwhile, romance has become the least
favorite
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 in 2006
as well as
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 in 1996.
Additionally
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, the
percentage
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 of films released had no significant patterns. Most of the genres encountered a steady growth, except for romance which still remained at the same level of
percentage
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 for both years. It was about 7
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percent
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per cent
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 of the total films launched. The
Drama
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genre
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also
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 became the directors's
favorite
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 to be released. The
percentage
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 of
drama
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 released has surpassed
comedy
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, fantasy, and romance for
10-year
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a 10-year
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 span of period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, percentage, drama, comedy, genre, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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