Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

People
always desire to buy something, especially products that are costly and unnecessary; so, many are ended up in debt just to get something they can not afford. Many
people
when they
started
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to work, it is common in the societies to get
credit
cards
. Having the
cards
allows them to purchase larger things
such
as; phones and unnecessary gadgets. It divided the price into small fractions; making it feel like nothing, so few
people
can control their temptation.
Also
, banks are often promoting
credit
card
privileges, and low instalment rates but not the payment procedure; many new
credit
card
holders do not know exactly how much they can pay back, and
this
results in being in debt with the bank.
This
habit can be avoided by carefully studying the terms and conditions of each
card
, when, and how much it costs for the payback.
Furthermore
, if already hold a
credit
card
, not all
payment
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payments
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should be in an instalment because it requires
high
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a high
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percentage of interests which add a lot to the final price.
This
would be great to teach essential financial knowledge in school to prepare financially smart
people
because habit forming takes time.
However
,
credit
cards
does
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not always have negative aspects, a fair amount of
people
still choose to hold
cards
because
it
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they
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provides
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many privileges to compensate
the
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payment but
it
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they
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needs
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to be managed wisely.
Therefore
, every purchase needs careful consideration before being in any debt because it will be better for everyone to stay debt-free or
can
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apply
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wisely gain privilege benefits from
credit
cards
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • financial literacy
  • impulse buying
  • credit score
  • debt management
  • sustainable living
  • emotional spending
  • budgeting skills
  • peer pressure
  • retail therapy
  • frugality
  • credit limit
  • financial counseling
  • minimalistic lifestyle
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