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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the
town
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 of Canterbury. The sites s1 and s2
shows
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show
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 the two possible sites for a new school to forge. Canterbury is a small city with almost
of
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apply
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9500 population. On the north side of the map depicts the University. Towards the
centre
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 of the
map
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map,
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 we can see a
Town
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centre
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, with a no traffic zone. S1 is located in the northeast
region
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, where a main road extends from one end of the
town
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centre
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.
On the other hand
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, s2 is located in the
town
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centre
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 which is marked as
no
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a
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 traffic
region
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. Next to that extends
main
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the main
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 road to Chartham
town
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and
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which
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 is 7
kms
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km
 away.
According to
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 the data, s2 looks ideal for the construction of the school.
However
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,
this
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region
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 is far away for people who are located in
Sturry
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the Sturry
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region
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as well as
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 those who are in Chartham. The main advantage
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this
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of this
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site
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 is that, it is free of traffic. So that children will be
out
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at
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 of risk
from
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apply
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accidents. At the same
time
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time,
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 it is
bit
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a bit
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 away from the University in comparison with
site
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 s1. The s1
site
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 is more
closure
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close
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 to
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 which makes the people from Chartham
to
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apply
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travel long
distance
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distances
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.
Its
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It's
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 a major drawback of
this
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site
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.
To conclude
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 s2 looks more ideal than s1 by considering the safety and
accessiility
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accessibility
 of people.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, region, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • accessibility
  • proximity
  • town centre
  • site
  • amenities
  • proposed development
  • population distribution
  • environmental impact
  • traffic congestion
  • community needs
  • educational facilities
  • public transport
  • recreational areas
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