The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the
town
of Canterbury. The sites s1 and s2 shows
the two possible sites for a new school to forge.
Canterbury is a small city with almostCorrect subject-verb agreement
show
of
9500 population. On the north side of the map depicts the University. Towards the Change preposition
apply
centre
of the map
we can see a Add a comma
map,
Town
centre
, with a no traffic zone. S1 is located in the northeast region
, where a main road extends from one end of the town
centre
. On the other hand
, s2 is located in the town
centre
which is marked as no
traffic Correct determiner usage
a
region
. Next to that extends main
road to Chartham Correct article usage
the main
town
and
is 7 Correct word choice
which
kms
away.
Correct your spelling
km
According to
the data, s2 looks ideal for the construction of the school. However
, this
region
is far away for people who are located in Sturry
Correct article usage
the Sturry
region
as well as
those who are in Chartham. The main advantage this
Change preposition
of this
site
is that, it is free of traffic. So that children will be out
of risk Change preposition
at
from
accidents. At the same Change preposition
apply
time
it is Add a comma
time,
bit
away from the University in comparison with Correct article usage
a bit
site
s1. The s1 site
is more closure
to Replace the word
close
Add an article
the country
country side
which makes the people from Chartham Correct your spelling
countryside
to
travel long Change the verb form
apply
distance
. Fix the agreement mistake
distances
Its
a major drawback of Replace the word
It's
It is
this
site
. To conclude
s2 looks more ideal than s1 by considering the safety and accessiility
of people.Correct your spelling
accessibility
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, region, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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