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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experiences and developing soft skill is more important. Discuss both view and give ur opinion

#university #education #job #hand #people #experiences #skill #ur
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In the modern world, it is getting more difficult to find and to get
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job
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. It
is say
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 that the
job
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 is got with own skill but others think that graduating
university
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from university
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 is
th
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the
 best solution to find
the
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job
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. I think both views are the most important points to work in any
places
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. On the one hand, Nowadays more people think that the vitality is for working
that
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than
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 taking higher
education
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 and
gratituding
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gratitude
 university. It is true because some jobs
demands
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 qualifications.
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, teaching at school is more difficult than other work because
tis
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it
this
 requires pedagogical skills and teachers get these skills by getting
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education
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an education
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 and learning teaching methods at universities.
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, some people argue that ideas, and they give their opinions which
it
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apply
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must not
required
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require
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diploma
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a diploma
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 and
got
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apply
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higher
education
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.
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, a few jobs
does
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 not need any
certificate
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certificates
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and
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or
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diploma
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diplomas
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 so they do not have to waste their time
to study
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studying
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 at universities.
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,
engineering
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an engineering
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job
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 demands more
own
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apply
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skills by learning and by watching building techniques. In conclusion, both given opinions which are studying and not studying at universities
for getting
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to get
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 work are truthful because My opinion
to
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of
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this
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 is that we must take
education
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 because during our life, sometimes we face
to teach
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teaching
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 our children at that time it requires
us
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 higher knowledge.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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