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The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates how many parcels were sent over the course of the 80-year period from 1920 by Federal Express and
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 Mail Services.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
number
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 of services FedEx did varied consistently whilst those of
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 almost followed an upward trend throughout the period. For
TNT
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 company, there were little over 5000 packages delivered in 1920 before the figure experienced a gradual increase in the next 50 years to reach roughly 12,000 in 1960.
Afterward
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, the
number
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 remained relatively stable after 2 decades, though there were small changes. Eventually, in the
last
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 20 years, the amount of mail
TNT
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 sent went up dramatically to the peak of around 25000, which was nearly five times over what it was at the start of the period.
On the other hand
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, FedEx started with a tripled
number
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 compared to
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 and was followed by a considerable growth to the highest point of approximately 24,000 in 1940.
However
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, 1950 came with an abrupt decrease of over ten thousand and continued to go down to a low, which was almost equal to the figure for
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 ten years later.
Then
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, the
number
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 grew again before
leveling
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 off at nearly 18,000 parcels.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tnt, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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