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The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the activities that
was
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were
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 done by anthropology bachelors after they had graduated from One University. Meanwhile, the table indicates how much money
earned
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is earned
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 by
anthropologist
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anthropologists
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 who
has
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have
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work
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worked
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 for five or more years.
Overall
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, most anthropology
fresh-graduates
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fresh graduates
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 chose to have full-time
work
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 and only
few
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a few
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 of them decided to have higher education
while
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 doing part-time
work
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.
On the other hand
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, after five years
working
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of working
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 experience, half of the
antropologists
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anthropologists
anthropologist
 who
work
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 in
government
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the government
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 sector got
highest
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the highest
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 salary. Looking into details, students who did full-time
job
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jobs
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 after they had graduated accounted for 52% of
total
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the total
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. In the second place, 15% of them were likely to have part-time
job
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jobs
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, surpassing those who
unemployed
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were unemployed
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 which was recorded at 12%.
While
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 8%
fresh
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of fresh
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 graduates chose to pursue higher education as much as those who were unknown. Grouping by salaries, the majority of 5-year-experienced anthropologists regardless
their
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of their
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workfield
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work field
 could earn more than $100,000, especially in
government
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the government
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 sector. Those who
work
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 in private
company
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companies are
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 more likely to
received
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receive
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 $50,000-74,999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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