The chart below illustrates the proportion of change in the share of global students amid university graduates in different Canadian states among 2001 and 2006.

The chart below illustrates the proportion of change in the share of global students amid university graduates in different Canadian states among 2001 and 2006.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of variations of international graduates from 8 different states of Canada over
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period.
Overall
, it is apparent that apart from Alberta, the proportion of global
students
has decreased from 2001 to 2006 and the state of New Brunswick accounted for most
students
over the whole period. Looking into detail, the figures for New Brunswick and Nova Scotia had a superiority over others, which stood at approximately 7% in 2001,
then
increased to 12% and 11%, respectively.
However
, Manitoba, Newfoundland, and Ontario were responsible for the least amount in
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percentages of
students
, who were international, which all started below 5%, which was followed by a two-time rise in 2006. As regards the
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, the percentage of international
students
in Quebec was almost 6%,
then
rose to 7-8%,
while
the figure for British Columbia was over 10% in 2006, which was 3 times as high as that
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in 2001.
In contrast
, Alberta was the only state that witnessed a slight decline to under 5% during the period.
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