The given chart below illustrates the proportion of individuals of 4 kinds age groups who watched in movie theater in one national European between 2000 and 2011.

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This

graph depicts 4 kinds age

groups

who watched in

movie

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a movie

the movie

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theater

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theatre

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in one national European, by the y-axis

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apply

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shows the percentages of the 4 kinds age and the x-axis illustrate the change in

years

. By observing the graph it seems that the 15-24

group

was facing many changes during the

years

, and the

group

7-14,

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and 25

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-35 seems more staple and closer to each other, they started with a different percentage and ended up with the same percentage, the

group

who include 35 and over did not face any

noticable

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noticeable

notable

changes compared to the other

groups

but only in the

last

years

the

group

started to face

unsual

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unusual

changes.

To conclude

, all of the three

groups

was having

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had

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an extreme amount of

changing

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change

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in the percentage

expect

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except

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the 35 and over

group

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the group

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, it was more stable than the other

groups

but only in the

last

years

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years,

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the

percenrage

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percentage

started

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start

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to increase.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, years, group with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

154 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

proportion
individuals
age groups
watched in movie theater
national
European
between
2000
2011
describe
compare
attendance
changes
summarize
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