The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time.   Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The first

given

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apply

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line

graph

illustrates the

number

of passengers between 2000 and 2009. Meanwhile, the second

given

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apply

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line

graph

depicts the proportion of trains running

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compared with

it’s

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its

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target.

Overall

, the

number

of train passengers and the proportion of

train

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trains

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running to the target

was

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apply

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gradually increased.

According to

the first

line

graph

, the

number

of train passengers started from a bit of 35 and ended up in about 42.

However

, there was a

decreased

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from about 40 to 35 in the

year

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years

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2002 to 2003. After that, a major increase

was happened

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happened

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between 2023 and 2005 which came from 35 to more than 45.

According to

the second

line

graph

, the proportion of trains running on time to the target started from 92

percent

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per cent

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and ended up

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percent

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per cent

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. There was a rebound where the

number

of trains running on time fell to 92

percent

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in the year 2006.

However

, it had increased significantly from 92 to 97 between 2006 and 2008

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph, number with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

166 words

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