The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time. 
 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009. The second graph shows the percentage of trains running on time.




Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first
given
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apply
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line
graph
illustrates the
number
of passengers between 2000 and 2009. Meanwhile, the second
given
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apply
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line
graph
depicts the proportion of trains running
on
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compared with
it’s
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its
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target.
Overall
, the
number
of train passengers and the proportion of
train
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trains
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running to the target
was
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apply
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gradually increased.
According to
the first
line
graph
, the
number
of train passengers started from a bit of 35 and ended up in about 42.
However
, there was a
decreased
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decrease
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from about 40 to 35 in the
year
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years
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2002 to 2003. After that, a major increase
was happened
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happened
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between 2023 and 2005 which came from 35 to more than 45.
According to
the second
line
graph
, the proportion of trains running on time to the target started from 92
percent
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per cent
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and ended up
in
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at
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97
percent
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per cent
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. There was a rebound where the
number
of trains running on time fell to 92
percent
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per cent
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in the year 2006.
However
, it had increased significantly from 92 to 97 between 2006 and 2008
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line, graph, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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