The three pie charts provide information about the percentage of degrees granted in terms of four different professions at the National University over the period in question.

The three pie charts provide information about the percentage of degrees granted in terms of four different professions at the National University over the period in question.
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The pie charts give information about the
proportion
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of degrees granted in terms of professions (Computer Science, Medicine, Law and Business) at the National University in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
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, Computer Science's degree
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increased over the shown period in the charts.
In contrast
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, the percentage of business degrees steadily decline over the 2 decades.
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, Medicine and Law changed the trends twice
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the same period. Turning to the data in more detail, in 1990, the degree percentage of Computer Science started to 30% and increased
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% every 10 years in 2000, and 2010 respectively.
On the other hand
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, Business degree proportions decreased during two decades,
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at 30% but
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20% and eventually
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15% in 2010.
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, Medicine's
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grew
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30% in 2000
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but came back
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same
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like
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25% in 1990 and 2010.
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, the smallest amount of
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was Law over the two decades, 15%, 10%, and 15% respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • professions
  • industry demands
  • societal trends
  • gender distribution
  • equality
  • persistent gender gaps
  • job market
  • supply and demand
  • employment challenges
  • technological advancements
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • societal shifts
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