Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
group
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groups
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of people think sports games are important for society,
while
others believe they should be taken as free time activities. Some
sport
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sports
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which we have to play in
outdoor
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outdoors
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it
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apply
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can
be play
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be played
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on
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in
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your free time
such
as football and
batmintion
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badminton
we have to play in a group
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Expand your response to address fully the essay prompt. Include both views mentioned in the prompt as well as your own opinion.
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Develop your ideas more fully with explanations and examples. Adding more detail will help support your points.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This will improve readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas for clearer structure.
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You began to address the topic of sports and society.
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Mentioning specific sports (football and badminton) shows an attempt to provide examples, which is good practice.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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