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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentages of
energy
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consumption
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 and electricity generation in the
last
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 year. On the whole, coal and gas accounted for high rates in both charts. Speaking of total world
energy
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consumption
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, oil was the most popular than any other way
last
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 year. Looking more closely, oil was at 34.3% and it was over 15 times more than hydro which is the lowest in all
energy
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consumption
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 except other. Following that, coal was at 25.1%, gas was at 20.9%, and nuclear was at 6.5%.
On the other hand
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, oil was not popular and it was the second lowest in all electricity generation way.
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, coal and gas were higher than any others and it was at 39.8% and 19.6% respectively. Interestingly, hydro and nuclear have the high and same proportion , despite they both accounted for
low
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a low
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 rate in the
energy
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consumption
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 chart. Specifically, they were at around 16% in
this
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 chart.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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