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The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.

The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.
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The charts depict the information about the number of
Japanese
traveling
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travelling
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 abroad, compared to those who
choosed
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chose
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Australia as their
traveling
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travelling
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 destination over the
ten years
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ten-year
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period
. Looking from
overall
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an overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the number of people from Japan who
traveling
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travel
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 to
another countries
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another country
other countries
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 gradually experienced a significant rise in
time
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the time
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period
 given.
Similarly
, the figure of
Japanese
 that came to visit Australia was rising throughout the years mentioned, despite a slight dip in the middle of the
period
. First of all, it is evident that the interest rate of
traveling
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travelling
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 abroad among
Japanese
 was consistently high. Began
from
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with
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 approximately 5
million
 people in 1985, and gradually
rising
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rose
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 before
reached
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reaching
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 its peak at around 15
million
. For some
reasons
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reason
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, the percentage of
Japanese
 who went to Australia slightly dipped in 1989
about
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at
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 roughly 0.5
million
.
Overall
, it faced a significant rise to
maximum
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a maximum
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6
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of 6
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million
in
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at
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 the end of the
period
 mentioned.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas tourists
  • chart analysis
  • data interpretation
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • tourist trends
  • economic factors
  • promotional activities
  • visa policies
  • cultural influences
  • social factors
  • culmination of trends
  • speculation
  • preference shifts
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