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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of renewable
energy
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 in Australia,
Sweden
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,
Iceland
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 and Turkey between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
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, there were increases in the share of renewable
energy
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 in
Iceland
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 and
Sweden
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, with
Iceland
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 being consistently the largest figure and having a far distance from Australia and
Sweden
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. It is
also
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 clear that the proportion of renewable
energy
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 in Turkey was at the second level throughout the period. Looking first at areas with rises in the percentage of renewable
energy
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, 45% of renewable
energy
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 in
Iceland
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 in 1997, after which it experienced considerable growth to 60% in 2000 and reached the highest point at exactly 70% in 2010. A similar trend, but to a lesser extent about one per eight compared to
Iceland
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, was seen in
Sweden
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. Just 5% of renewable
energy
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 in
Sweden
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 in 1997, before
this
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 figures for growing to 9%
at the end
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 of the period. Turning next to the other two areas, the share of renewable
energy
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 saw a slight rise from 38% in 1997 to a peak of exactly 40% in the next three years, but
subsequently
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 it decreased to 32%
at the end
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 of the time frame. A drop in the percentage of renewable but at a rate more steady than in Turkey
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 was seen in Australia, with the figures falling from 9% at the beginning to 3% in the next thirteen years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sweden, iceland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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