The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.

The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.
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the proportion of water consumption in various
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by
Australian
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Australians
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in 2004.
It is clear that
the Residential houses had the largest amount of
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usage
while
the Other portion stood at the lowest amount of consumption and the Bathroom had the most intensive usage. Regarding the statistics what stands out from the scheme is that houses with over half
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(57%) stood
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first place of the water consumers. People who lived in apartments had 13% of usage which is one quarter of houses approximately.
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, the Industry and the Business had 11% and 10% respectively which showed a negligible difference. The government sector with 6% was twofold more than the Other part. Looking closely at the graphs show that,using water in the Bathroom with 28% had the highest rate of consumption
also
, Gardening had 27%
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utilization which means that, they had a minimal difference
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1%.
the Toilet
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wester was 5%
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than the Washing
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segment.
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unit with 20% was diploid in comparison to the kitchen part.
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