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The table below gives information about a restaurant's average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table below gives information about a restaurant's average sales in three different branches in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The table
shown
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 the
avarage
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average
 sales of
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Georgia
Street
,
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Dunsmuir
Street
, and
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Drake
Street
 in Vancouver in 2016. From the information given, it is clearly shown that
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Georgia
Street
 got the highest
transaction
numbers
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number
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 of 854, which is more than two times the number of 390 in
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Georgia
Street
.
Meanwhie
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Meanwhile
, the
transaction
 value of
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Georgia
Street
 was
also
 the highest
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 $10.69
whereas
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Dunsmuir
Street
 got the
least
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lowest
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with
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 only $5.61.
In addition
 to the number of
transcation
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transaction
transactions
, both the eat-in and take-away
transaction
 of
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Georgia
Street
 was the top among the three, which was 405 and 449 respectively,
while
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Drake
Street
 had the both lowest eat-in and take-away
number
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numbers
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 of
transaction
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transactions
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 with 200 and 190 respectively. And chicken was the
best selling
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items
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 in all shops.
As a result
,
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Georgia
Street
 is the shop with the most
satifatory
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satisfactory
 one and can
owns
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 the highest
expactation
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expectation
expectations
 among the three.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words georgia, street, transaction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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