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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the types of
energy
 from several sources between 1985 and 2003.
Overall
, the major source of
energy
 is oil
while
the
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Hydrogen and other renewable
energy
 are the least. The use of oil was the highest in 1985 and it
remain
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 the significant source in 2003 even if the percentage decreased slightly from 52% to 39%. Nuclear was the second highest type of source in 1985 with 22% but it was replaced by natural gas in 2003 (23%), where
the
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nuclear had 17% only. The use of coal and other renewable
energy
had
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 increased substantially. For coal, it increased from 8% to 13%. For other renewable, it had increased 4 times.
Finally
, the percentage of Hydrogen
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 unchanged which was 4%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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