the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features  and make comparison where relevant.
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What has been depicted in
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chart is the amount of food consumed
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as fish, lamb, beef, and chicken in a European nation from 1979 to 2004.
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, throughout the whole time, the largest proportion of the meat consumption was dedicated to chicken among other mentioned categories,
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that of fish accounted for the lowest. From 1979 to 2004, Chicken and lamb followed almost an opposite pattern each other, the former ranged from nearly 150 to 250
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, and the latter
stared
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started
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the point at 150
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and finished at around 60
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per week. Despite the fact that, in 1979, the consumption of beef ranked first over the other items (approximately 220
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per week), it gradually decreased and arrived at about 100
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in 2004.
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, fish consumption stood
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in the amount allocated, which started at almost 52
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and
essentially
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unchanged
at the end
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of the period.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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