You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In
todays
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world, it is achievable that most amount of
school
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schools
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can provide
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a completely
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completely
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muti-education
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education
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. but in
this
case, a group of individuals
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that
thay
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they
must
to
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always work on the major subject.
While
, the others argue that students need to focus on some living skills
such
as the
fuction
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function
in
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of
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different
food
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foods
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and how to cook them. Personally, I
am slightly
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agree
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agree on
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the
letter
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view. It is undeniable that school
is build
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for
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to
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study
the
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basic academic knowledge and prepare to face the
highly
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goal
as
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university and career in future.
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those living
skill
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may disturb the
student
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practice
the
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main subject
due to
the energy is not enough to support both
work
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works
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.
Additionally
,
teacher
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teachers
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are doing extra work in cooking
class
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classes
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.
For example
, they have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to clean the
kithchen
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kitchen
and buy raw
food
for cooking.
Although
study
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is play
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plays
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significant
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role in
student's
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a student's
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future,
but
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people can not
leave
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live
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without
food
. There are several
reason
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reasons
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that
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apply
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why kids need to learn to prepare
the
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apply
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food
in school.
Firstly
, cooking is
more
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cheaper than restaurant, which can save money. and you can cook
food
that you want to eat at any time.
Secondlly
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Secondly
, It is
more easy
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to
considered
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the
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junk
food
and
health
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dish
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dishes
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when you
learned
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learn
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those
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apply
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food
science knowledge. In conclusion, learning those living
skill
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skills
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is
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outweight
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outweigh
outweighed
the academic
subject
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subjects
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.
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