The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information on the rate of cosmetic surgery
which has
done by Korean men and women in 2004.
As an Verb problem
apply
overall
trend,the most hair transplantation was among males,while
eyelid surgery was the most well-known for females.
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laser skin
was
common among both genders which Change the verb form
were
was
around 60,40 and approximately 20 respectively for men,Change the verb form
were
whereas
this
was vary
for females (above 200,less Change the verb form
varied
than300
,Correct your spelling
than 300
more
than 100)per each of them .
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and more
Furthermore
,they had other operations such
as abdominoplasty which was just under 20 for males,moreover
, breast enlargement was considerably over 100 for females.Submitted by Elisa on
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