The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart provides information on the rate of cosmetic surgery

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done by Korean men and women in 2004. As an

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trend,the most hair transplantation was among males,

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eyelid surgery was the most well-known for females. As can be seen clearly from the graph,

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common among both genders which

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around 60,40 and approximately 20 respectively for men,

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for females (above 200,less

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than 100)per each of them .

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,they had other operations

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as abdominoplasty which was just under 20 for males,

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, breast enlargement was considerably over 100 for females.

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specific procedures
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number of procedures
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The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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