Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

There is no denying the fact that
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traffic and pollution are a global issue that
affact
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affect
affects
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in several ways.
While
it is held belief that increasing the
cost
of
petrol
could solve the
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problem
, there is an argument opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the problem is
begier
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better
than higher the
cost
, it is about
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how
serios
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serious
the problem is, but it will
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reduce
the
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use
of
petrol
withn
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within
with
tiny
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a tiny
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amount that will be
unnoticable
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unnoticeable
.
To begin
with, if
this
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has been done by the countries, it will appear
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.
In other words
, the
increasing
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of
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the goods'
prices
, because the trucks that deliver the products will have higher
petrol
cost
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costs
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.
In addition
, by increasing of goods, the
resturants
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restaurants
restaurant
will be more expensive,
as a result
of it.
For example
, in 2004, Saudi Arabia faced a war with Iraq, so the army
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to use
high
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amount of
petrol
, the
prices
went up
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every thing
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everything
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that has
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related
whith
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with
which
the
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use
of
petrol
,
such
as
,
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gas for cars,
foods
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food
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and even water.
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Another
point to consider
,
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is when the
prices
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of
petrol
goes
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up, it is a
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trouble
sighn
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sign
of
counries'
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countries
economy. It is
also
possible to say that,
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petrol's
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petrol
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prices
is
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are
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an
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globle considretion
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global consideration
, so the country can not control
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them
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.
Moreover
, there is a meeting that the
bigest
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20 countries do every year
which
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in which
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they discuss
the
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petrol
prices
.
For instance
, the
last
meeting was in
Chaina
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China
which was the Russian war so they went to reduce the
prices
because it went up after the war. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I
belive
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that increasing
of
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the
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petrol's
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petrol
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cost
has
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a biger
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biger
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issue that will appear
of
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this
. Finding another
surce
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source
of energy is a better
soultion
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solution
.
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Introduction could be more concise with a clearer statement of your opinion. Try to directly address the question with a succinct thesis statement.
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Use paragraphing to clearly separate your ideas. Considering organizing your essay with one idea per paragraph and use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main idea.
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Check for repeated spelling and grammar errors that can hinder the clarity of your ideas. Tools or peer review could help improve accuracy.
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Although the examples provided are relevant, ensure they directly support your main argument. Clearly linking your examples to your main point can strengthen your argument.
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Exploring alternative solutions in more depth could enrich your argument and demonstrate a broader understanding of the topic.
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The conclusion summarizes your stance and suggests an alternative solution, providing a clear end to your argument.

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