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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
There is no denying the fact that
the
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traffic and pollution are a global issue that
affact
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affect
affects
human
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humans
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 in several ways.
While
 it is held belief that increasing the
cost
 of
petrol
 could solve the
proplem
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problem
, there is an argument opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the problem is
begier
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better
 than higher the
cost
, it is about
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 how
serios
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serious
 the problem is, but it will
reduse
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reduce
 the
uasege
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use
 of
petrol
withn
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within
with
tiny
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a tiny
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 amount that will be
unnoticable
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unnoticeable
.
To begin
 with, if
this
sloution
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 has been done by the countries, it will appear
another problems
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.
In other words
, the
increasing
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of
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in
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 the goods'
prices
, because the trucks that deliver the products will have higher
petrol
cost
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costs
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.
In addition
, by increasing of goods, the
resturants
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restaurants
restaurant
 will be more expensive,
as a result
 of it.
For example
, in 2004, Saudi Arabia faced a war with Iraq, so the army
has
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 to use
high
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a high
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 amount of
petrol
, the
prices
 went up
of
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for
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every thing
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everything
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 that has
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related
whith
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with
which
 the
usege
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use
 of
petrol
,
such
 as
,
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 gas for cars,
foods
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food
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 and even water.
Anthore
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Another
 point to consider
,
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 is when the
prices
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price
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 of
petrol
goes
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 up, it is a
tourble
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trouble
sighn
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sign
 of
counries'
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countries
 economy. It is
also
 possible to say that,
the
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petrol's
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petrol
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prices
is
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are
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an
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globle considretion
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global consideration
, so the country can not control
it
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them
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.
Moreover
, there is a meeting that the
bigest
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 20 countries do every year
which
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in which
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 they discuss
the
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petrol
prices
.
For instance
, the
last
 meeting was in
Chaina
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China
 which was the Russian war so they went to reduce the
prices
 because it went up after the war. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I
belive
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believe
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 that increasing
of
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the
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petrol's
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petrol
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cost
has
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is
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a biger
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biger
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bigger
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 issue that will appear
of
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this
. Finding another
surce
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source
 of energy is a better
soultion
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solution
.
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task achievement
Introduction could be more concise with a clearer statement of your opinion. Try to directly address the question with a succinct thesis statement.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphing to clearly separate your ideas. Considering organizing your essay with one idea per paragraph and use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main idea.
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Check for repeated spelling and grammar errors that can hinder the clarity of your ideas. Tools or peer review could help improve accuracy.
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Although the examples provided are relevant, ensure they directly support your main argument. Clearly linking your examples to your main point can strengthen your argument.
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Exploring alternative solutions in more depth could enrich your argument and demonstrate a broader understanding of the topic.
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You've shown an ability to introduce complex ideas related to the prompt.
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The conclusion summarizes your stance and suggests an alternative solution, providing a clear end to your argument.
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