Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?
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affects
human
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it is held belief that increasing the cost
of petrol
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a tiny
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unnoticeable
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, the increasing
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in
prices
, because the trucks that deliver the products will have higher petrol
cost
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costs
In addition
, by increasing of goods, the resturants
will be more expensive, Correct your spelling
restaurants
restaurant
as a result
of it. For example
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a high
petrol
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foods
and even water.
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price
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are
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a
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them
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in which
the
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petrol
prices
. For instance
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prices
because it went up after the war.
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solution
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Introduction could be more concise with a clearer statement of your opinion. Try to directly address the question with a succinct thesis statement.
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Use paragraphing to clearly separate your ideas. Considering organizing your essay with one idea per paragraph and use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph's main idea.
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Check for repeated spelling and grammar errors that can hinder the clarity of your ideas. Tools or peer review could help improve accuracy.
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Although the examples provided are relevant, ensure they directly support your main argument. Clearly linking your examples to your main point can strengthen your argument.
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Exploring alternative solutions in more depth could enrich your argument and demonstrate a broader understanding of the topic.
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The conclusion summarizes your stance and suggests an alternative solution, providing a clear end to your argument.
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