Increasing the price of petrol will reduce the traffic and polution, to what you agree or dissagre with this statment

There is no denying the fact that traffic and pollution are a global issue that
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humans in several ways.
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it is held belief that increasing the cost of
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could solve the problem, there is an argument opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the problem is better than higher the cost, it is about feeling how serious the problem is, but it will reduce the use of
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a tiny amount that will be unnoticeable.
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solution has been done by the countries, it will
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other problems.
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, the increase in the goods'
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, because the trucks that deliver the products will have higher
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costs.
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, by increasing of goods, the restaurants will be more expensive,
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of it.
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, in 2004, Saudi Arabia faced a war with Iraq, so the army had to use a high amount of
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went up for everything that
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related which the use of
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,
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as gas for cars, food and even water. Another point to consider is when the price of
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up, it is a trouble sign of
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economy. It is
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possible to say that,
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prices
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are a global consideration, so the country can not control them.
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, there is a meeting that the biggest 20 countries do every year in which they discuss
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prices
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, the
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meeting was in China which was the Russian war so they went to reduce the
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because it went up after the war. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that increasing
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cost is
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issue that will
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. Finding another source of energy is a better solution.

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