Increasing the price of petrol will reduce the traffic and polution, to what you agree or dissagre with this statment
There is no denying the fact that traffic and pollution are a global issue that
affect
humans in several ways. Change the verb form
affects
While
it is held belief that increasing the cost of petrol
could solve the problem, there is an argument opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the problem is better than higher the cost, it is about feeling how serious the problem is, but it will reduce the use of petrol
Change preposition
by
within
a tiny amount that will be unnoticeable.
Change preposition
by
To begin
with, if this
solution has been done by the countries, it will appear
other problems. Verb problem
cause
In other words
, the increase in the goods' prices
, because the trucks that deliver the products will have higher petrol
costs. In addition
, by increasing of goods, the restaurants will be more expensive, as a result
of it. For example
, in 2004, Saudi Arabia faced a war with Iraq, so the army had to use a high amount of petrol
, the
Correct word choice
and the
prices
went up for everything that has
related which the use of Unnecessary verb
apply
petrol
, such
as gas for cars, food and even water.
Another point to consider is when the price of petrol
go
up, it is a trouble sign of Change the verb form
goes
countries
economy. It is Replace the word
a country's
also
possible to say that, petrol
prices
are a global consideration, so the country can not control them. Moreover
, there is a meeting that the biggest 20 countries do every year in which they discuss petrol
prices
. For instance
, the last
meeting was in China which was the Russian war so they went to reduce the prices
because it went up after the war.
In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that increasing petrol
cost is bigger
issue that will Add an article
a bigger
the bigger
appear
Verb problem
cause
this
. Finding another source of energy is a better solution.Submitted by Aljawir3 on
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