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Band 5.5

The given bar chart shows the number of boys and girls playing sports in Great Britain

The given bar chart shows the number of boys and girls playing sports in Great Britain
The line graph illustrates that a large
number
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 of
boys
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 and
girls
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 doing sports in
uk
Correct your spelling
UK
 it is clear from the chart that the
boys
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 who used to play football
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 the largest amount of
number
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 in English
town
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towns
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 in 2012.
moreover
Linking Words
,
boys
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 in tennis have 50
while
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girls
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 have around 38.
otherwise
Linking Words
, we can
saw
Wrong verb form
see
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 from the graph that
girls
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 have
the
Correct article usage
a
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 huge
number
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compering
Verb problem
compared
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with
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to
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boys
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 in swimming the
precentge
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percentage
 of
girls
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 in swimming was 50.
while
Linking Words
boys
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 have only 40.
on the other hand
Linking Words
, if we look
to
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at
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 the chart from the other view, we
saw
Wrong verb form
see
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 the lowest
number
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 in both of them is in Hockey
wich
Correct your spelling
which
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 is
girls
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 have 10 and
boys
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 close to 15.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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