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Many people prefer to stay in the same type of work all their life, whereas others prefer to change the type of work. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.

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In today's world, individuals like to explore more professional
opitions
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opinions
.It is considered by some that changing
field
 of
work
 is better,
while
 there are others who
thinks
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 that choosing the same kind of
work
 is more stable. In my opinion,
combination
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 of the two is the best way forward. On
one
 hand,
the
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advocates
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of
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the idea that
people
 should stick to the same type of
work
 throughout their
life
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 because they can become experts in
one
skill
.
As it
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 is better to be a master in
one
skill
 rather than
being
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 involved in multiple
skills
 at once without mastering none of these. Take
an
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 example of Brazil, where most of the
people
 try to learn the
skill
 of farming because about 70% of the
people
 are associated with
this
field
.
Thus
, excelling in
one
skill
 is good for some
people
.
While
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on the other hand
, supporters of the idea that
people
 should learn different
skills
 and change their type of
work
 to compete with the modern requirements of the progressing world. As we can advancements are being made in every
field
 of
life
 and to be in parallel pace with
this
, a person has to be updated
according to
 the need rather than being stuck with the same type of
work
.
For example
 in numerous underdeveloped countries like Nigeria,
people
 are far behind the ones who have learned modern
skills
.
Hence
, trying new types of
work
 is an important thing in
life
.
However
, I
also
 believe that
one
 should try to match the requirements of the world and learn new things
as well as
 polish the existing
skills
.
For instance
, in my
field
 of software engineering, we have to be updated with every new technology to stay in
the
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competition with the rapidly changing technology. In conclusion, various personals prefer to stay in
one
 working domain whilst others tend to modify their initial jobs.
According to
 my way of thinking, I believe that learning new
skills
 and changing types of
work
 in professional
life
 leads to a sustainable lifestyle.
Submitted by namitabhoj1610 on

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Example Usage
Try to present more specific examples and detailed evidence to support your arguments, enhancing the persuasiveness of your essay.
Coherence
For coherence, ensure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next with clear topic sentences and linking words.
Task Response
To strengthen task achievement, focus on fully addressing all parts of the prompt, including discussing both views comprehensively and justifying your opinion.
Introduction/Conclusion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear, effectively setting the stage for your discussion and summarizing your view.
Logical Structure
Good use of logical structure, with a clear progression from one idea to the next.
Balanced Discussion
You have a balanced discussion of both sides of the argument which shows an understanding of the topic.
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