Many young people regularly change their job over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Nowadays, youngster
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their
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regularly over the years owing to several reasons which include dissatisfaction with
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their job
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job
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jobs
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, career growth and workload. To some, changing
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jobs
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job
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to another might bring opportunity and to
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it attracts unrepairable damage to
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a career
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career
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, though
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advantages
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certainly outweigh
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the disadvantages
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disadvantages
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. One of the biggest
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for
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jumping to another
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is career advancement and skill development as by switching candidate will gain impeccable skills which would
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help him/her in getting up on the corporate ladder.
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, communication skills can be horned only by indulging with various people and by exposure
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Try to elaborate more on your points by providing detailed examples and explanations to fully develop your arguments.
coherence cohesion
While your essay has a clear logical structure, improving paragraphing and using a variety of linking words could enhance the flow of information and arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure to provide a clear conclusion that summarises your views effectively, reinforcing the stance taken in the essay.
task achievement
You have successfully identified several key reasons for young people changing jobs which provides a solid foundation for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction sets up the essay topic well, providing a clear overview of what will be discussed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • personal fulfillment
  • values
  • fulfilling
  • benefits
  • motivator
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • climbing the career ladder
  • dynamic work environment
  • adaptability
  • opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • flexibility
  • professional and personal lives
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