You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ● explain what happened when you phoned the shop ● say what you would like the manager to do.

Mr. Mehul I am writing to inform you that yesterday I bought
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from your shop.
Unfortunately
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it did not
working
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work
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its showing
safety
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the safety
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lock is not working. I called
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twice
to your receptionist
they
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and they
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have written
my
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about my
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problem and they said that
shop
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the shop
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technician will
be contact
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you soon, but
i
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did
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not
get
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any call yet from
Technician
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the Technician
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. Again
i
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I
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called to receptionist
however
they gave
same
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answer. In
last
I decided to write
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to you .
Moreover
its
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it's
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better
you
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if you
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can send your technician as soon as possible. I would like
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you to
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help me out
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this
situation. Thank you Neha
dupia
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Dhupia
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure to use a proper greeting and closing to frame your letter more formally. For example, 'Dear Mr. Mehul,' to begin and 'Sincerely, Neha Dupia' to end.
Spelling and Word Choice
Check for spelling errors and improve word choice for professionalism. For instance, 'mixture' should be 'mixer', and 'it did not working' should be 'it is not working'.
Paragraph Structure
Use paragraphs to organize your letter into a clear structure: one for the introduction, one for each issue, and one for the resolution requested.
Linking Ideas
Enhance coherence by linking ideas more smoothly and using transitions where necessary to help the reader follow your argument.
Problem Description
You effectively described the problem and what actions you took, clearly explaining the situation.
Resolution Request
Your request to the manager is clear and polite, fitting the context of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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