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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologies in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologies in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the Anthropology graduates' destination after they finish their bachelor's degree, alongside the provided data of their wages as an anthropologist after five years' work.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 most of them did full-time work after graduating, and
people
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 who worked in the government sector had the highest salaries.
Firstly
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, there were 52% of graduates who chose to become full-time workers after university graduation.
Conversely
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, other types of jobs were chosen by less than 20% of
people
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.
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, those who work part-time are only 15%, followed by the unemployed at 12%, the full-time postgraduate study and the unknown at 8%, respectively.
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,
people
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 who became part-time workers and continued their studies for a master's degree have the smallest number at 5%. Regarding that, the type of employment has a different level of income. Those working in the government sector, at 50%, have the highest income of over $100,000.
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, 40% of freelance consultants have $75,000 to more than $100,000 in salaries.
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, private companies only provide an income of $100,000 for 30% of
people
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, the least among other companies.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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