IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

The chart shows requests for information at tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June

The chart shows requests for information at tourist office in the United Kingdom from January to June
#requests #information #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june
The graph
demonstrate
Change the verb form
demonstrates
show examples
 of difference
Change preposition
in distribute
show examples
distribute
Replace the word
distribution
show examples
 which were
people
 get
information
different
Change preposition
in different
show examples
 ways at
tourist
Correct article usage
the tourist
show examples
office
Fix the agreement mistake
offices
show examples
 between January and
June
. There are three types of
line
Fix the agreement mistake
lines
show examples
 on
graph
Correct article usage
a graph
show examples
 (in person, by letter, by telephone). The
In person
Add a hyphen
In-person
show examples
line
skyrocket
Wrong verb form
skyrocketed
show examples
 from January to
June
 that
line
demonstrate
Wrong verb form
demonstrated
show examples
people
prefer
Add the particle
prefer to
show examples
 get
information
 face to face basically in
middle
Add an article
the middle
show examples
 of
June
. The email
line
 has slightly
decrease
Change the verb form
decreased
show examples
 and more time
demonstrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
demonstrates
show examples
 stability. The
by telephone
Add a hyphen
by-telephone
show examples
line
basically
Add a missing verb
is basically
show examples
changeable
Correct article usage
a changeable
show examples
line
 from January to March but from March to April
demonstrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
demonstrates
show examples
exactly
Change the word
exact
show examples
 stability after that
slightly
Change the word
slight
show examples
 increase until
middle
Add an article
the middle
show examples
 of
June
.
People
 do not
prefer
Add the particle
prefer to
show examples
 get
information
 by letter or email because they do not have
patient
Replace the word
patience
show examples
 for waiting
answer
Fix the agreement mistake
answers
show examples
.
People
more
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
like directly get
information
by
Rephrase
directly by
show examples
 telephone or in person at tourist
office
Fix the agreement mistake
offices
show examples
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
consequence
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
people
 do not
lose
Verb problem
waste
show examples
 time.
Submitted by ayshanngurbanova on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Add some linking words.
▼
Linking words: Add linking words.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, information, june, line with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: