The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years. The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults who received qualifications from a range of education providers in three years.
The given bar chart illustrates the information on how many men and women of various
age
groups in Australia did exercise in 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of females was higher among all
age
groups than males, except the
age
from 15 to 24
years
. The women's figures in the
age
group of 15-24
years
accounted for 47,7%,
while
men's 52,8% in the same
age
.
However
, figures of two
age
groups 25-34 and 35-44
years
accounted for 48,9 and 52,5%, respectively. There was a stable increase in the number of females who like sport and reached the highest percentage of 53,3% in the
age
45-54
years
.
Moreover
, the number of women who did exercise regularly started to decline and showed 53% for 55-64
years
, followed by 47,1% for
age
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group of 65 and over.
In contrast
, the figures for men provided a considerable decrease from 52,8 to 39,5% from 15-24 to 35-44
years
.
However
, males who did physical activity regularly rose to 43,1% for the
age
45-54,
whereas
for the
age
group 65 and over reached 46,7%.
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