The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures describe
about
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the Norbiton industrial area now and future development
in
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on
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this
site.
Overall
it can be seen that the industries
are
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will be
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totally transformed in the upcoming days.
Firstly
, a roundabout is situated in the
center
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.
In addition
, two roads are connected with it and a river on the north side.
Additionally
, factories are situated surrounding of ring road cycle and
east
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the east
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sideb
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side
sides
of the street. Turning to the remaining maps it can
be illustrate
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that four paths are connected in the middle and shops are constructed in the south-west corner.
On the other
hand
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a medical center is established in the south-east portion. All factories are converted into
house
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houses
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. A new bridge is constructed into the river, which improves transport facilities throughout walkways.
Moreover
, a playground is observed on the
north-east
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northeast
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portion and a school on the east.
Finally
, farmland
remain
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on the same side and a little roundabout is added on the south, which makes
connection
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a connection
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into
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between
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path
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the path
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and
central
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the central
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part.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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