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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph provides information on the quantities of merchandise
transfer
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transferred
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 which was
transpoted
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transported
 by four methods(road,water,rail and pipeline)from 1974 to 2002.the units are written in million tonnes. As an
overall
 trend,both
road
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roads
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 and
water ways
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waterways
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 gradually increased,
however
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however,
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 the
raily way
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railways
 fluctuated and
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the ripeline
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ripeline
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pipeline
 was mostly steady
among
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during
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 these years. In
the
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apply
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terms of the first group,
the
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apply
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 pathway transport commenced from over 60 million tones and slightly increased to 80 tones
until
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by
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 1990 ,
in
contrast
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contrast,
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water way
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waterway
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 had a minor surge from 40 to around 50 til 1985 and
then
stay
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stayed
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 constant the
follow
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following
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 years ,
however
 , sharply increased to over 60 from 1995 to after 2000,
similarly
 a considerable increase from 80 to just under 100 happened from 1990 til the end of 2000 for the pathway.
furtheremore
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Furthermore
, railway transportation started from 40 tones and significantly fluctuated
sine
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since
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 1985 just under 40 til 2000 which became 40 million again,
on
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in
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 the contrast pipeline transforming was from over 0
in
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apply
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which surged to over 20 till after
the
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apply
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1980 and
stay
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stayed
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 steady until the end of 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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