The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates
average
use of money in a family over a given period in a particular country.
Correct article usage
the average
Overall
it can be seen that people are
mostly interested Wrong verb form
were
for
buying food in 1998, Change the preposition
in
whereas
in 2018 they are focusing in
free Change preposition
on
times
.
Looking at the dataset in more detail it can be described that in 1998 individuals Fix the agreement mistake
time
spending
6% Wrong verb form
spent
for
fuel and power, which was the lowest amount in Change preposition
on
this
year. Correct determiner usage
that
Additionally
, transports
, household and personal goods were similar Fix the agreement mistake
transport
fashion
. By 1968, meals had 35%, which was the highest value in the given chart. Change preposition
in fashion
In addition
, housing and clothing were 10%.
On the other hand
, turning to the remaining statistics it can be evident that in 2018 humans were eagerly invested for leisure period
, which was 23%. Fix the agreement mistake
periods
Moreover
, energy and private products contain only 4%, which was the minimum number in this
figure. Transportation includes 14% in 2018. Furthermore
, in 2018 houses and snacks were approximately 18% and 16%. Finally
, clothes and Footwears
were 5% in 2018.Fix the agreement mistake
Footwear
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