The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.

The bar chart gives information about the number of overseas Japanese tourists between 1985 and 1995, and the line graph illustrates percentage of those going to Australia between 1984 and 1994.
The given
chart
illustrates the quantity of Japanese
tourists
' journeys in the time period
of
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from 1980 to 1995,
in addition
, the line
graph
indicates the
number
of those abroad trips that were made to Australia between 1985 and 1994. As it might be concluded from the bar
chart
, the
least
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number
of
tourists
from Japan can be witnessed in 1985 as the vast
number
was
in
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95. Interestingly, the same tendency remains
at
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the data that the line
graph
shows.
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, in the contrast to the
graph
, the
chart
uplifts more steadily. The both,
chart
and
graph
clearly state that starting from 1990, the
number
of
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tourists
skyrocketed. The
chart
shows that the growth reached about 15 million Japanese
tourists
abroad as the
graph
depicts that
the
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about 6 per cent of all Japanese travellers abroad were to Australia in 1994. The sudden uplift can be trivially explained by the
tourists
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trends and economic factors in both of these countries mentioned above.
However
, the most probable reason could be visa policies.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, tourists, graph, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "uplifts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas tourists
  • chart analysis
  • data interpretation
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • tourist trends
  • economic factors
  • promotional activities
  • visa policies
  • cultural influences
  • social factors
  • culmination of trends
  • speculation
  • preference shifts
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