The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. (the piano was over 10% in 2005, over 20% in 2010, about 35% in 2015; the guitar was over 10% in 2005, about 18% in 2010, 40% in 2015; the drums was about 5% in 1005, about 4% in 2010, about 10% in 2015; the violin was 10% in 2005, 9% in 2010, 5% in 2015)

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. (the piano was over 10% in 2005, over 20% in 2010, about 35% in 2015; the guitar was over 10% in 2005, about 18% in 2010, 40% in 2015; the drums was about 5% in 1005, about 4% in 2010, about 10% in 2015; the violin was 10% in 2005, 9% in 2010, 5% in 2015)
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of four types of musical instruments comprising
piano
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, drum, guitar and violin with five-
year
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intervals from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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most children in a school are keen to play
piano
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and guitar. They seem not interested in drums,
however
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, it surpasses violin in the
last
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year
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.
To begin
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with, the
piano
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occupied just over 10% in 2005 before jumping to exactly 20% in 2010. An overwhelming increase of 20% was seen in 2015.
Moreover
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, the guitar came in second place with 10% in the first
year
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and
then
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rose to well under 20% in 2010. It surged to reach a peak at more than 40% and overcame the
piano
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in 2015.
Additionally
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, the drums started at nearly 5% and it remained constant at the same number as in 2005,
as well as
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escalating by 5% and ending at 10% in the
year
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2015. The violin in 2005 registered at 10% and it slightly dropped to nearly 8%.
Furthermore
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, It shot up in the
last
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year
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to be around 10% at became the
last
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place
at the end
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of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words piano, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instrument proficiency
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Percentage increase
  • Cultural impact
  • Technological advancements
  • Popularity surge
  • Music education trends
  • Instrument learning preferences
  • Gradual decline
  • Future projections
  • Statistical significance
  • Cultural preferences
  • Educational implications
  • Accessibility of instruments
  • Shifts in popular music genres
  • Adoption rates
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