Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow their customs and behaviour. Cthers disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or expcricnce. Write at least 250 words

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Nowadays Migration towards developed countries is rapidly increasing.
Due to
this
one part of the society argues that immigrants should always accept foreign region and their traditions.
while
other people counter that immigrant countries should learn and
value
their regional habits. I believe that society should accept the tradition of immigrants who move abroad.
To begin
with, civilization in a migration always plays a vital role in moving abroad. I totally agree that people should accept newcomer and their
way
of living, as in the
beginning
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it's very tough for them to adopt new customs.
For Example
. For a guy who moves
abroad
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abroad,
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it's very difficult for them to taste
the
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new cuisine which he or she has never eaten.
Besides
this
, the costume is
also
a major concern as it's a matter of comfort for a person.
However
, visitors should respect the lifestyle of the country and should try to adopt the
way
of living. As
,
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one should always give
value
to other habits and traditions.
Such
as the law and rules and regulations. a violation of
this
may create an imbalance in their respective culture.
For example
, Breaking the traffic rules can create congestion on the roads. So, following a code of conduct is extremely vital.
Nevertheless
, the resident
also
gives
value
to other heritage and cultures their foods and their
way
of living.
This
thing creates a positive impact on tourists. To illustrate, if a resident behaves in
good
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manner with tourists they will stay for longer periods of time and indirectly they help to boost the economy by paying taxes.
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this
, after seeing both sides' arguments, I would say society always stands with people who come from a long
way
. In my opinion, most countries should accept cultural differences and give
value
to their own culture
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