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You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want

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Dear Mr registrar, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that next
acadmic
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academic
 season I am joining
trinity
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Trinity College
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college
 as a 1st year student. I like to stay in
hall
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the hall
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 of residence for two years
intially
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initially
. I prefer roommates of my age. the room should have basic furniture and
wifi
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a Wi-Fi
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 connection. I am
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an eggatarian
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eggatarian
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vegetarian
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 and prefer
meal
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meals
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 which are
egg based
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egg-based
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. I am allergic to
non veg
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non-veg
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 food. so request you to kindly take note of it.
sometime
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Sometimes
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 vegetarian
meny
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many
 would
also
 be fine with me.
Furthermore
, if
Hall
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the Hall
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 of residence is not available
then
 any other
college
 hostel with basic facilities like furniture and wifi will be ok for me. please note that hostel should not too far from
college
 premises. As it will
time consuming
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 to travel to
college
. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Jetty jones
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Task Achievement
Consider utilizing more formal structures and a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your letter's formality and expressiveness.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve coherence, try to connect your sentences and paragraphs more smoothly, perhaps through the use of linking words or phrases.
General
Double-check your letter for minor spelling or grammatical errors to maintain a professional tone throughout.
Task Achievement
Your letter appropriately addresses all the required points mentioned in the task instruction.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your greeting and closing were suitably formal, fitting the context of a letter to a college registrar.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Hall of Residence
  • accommodation requirements
  • proximity
  • en-suite facilities
  • special accommodations
  • dietary restrictions
  • meal plans
  • kitchen facilities
  • campus canteens
  • securing accommodations
  • alternative housing options
  • private rentals
  • off-campus housing
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