The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram shows how apple is canned. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The picture below illustrates how apples are put in the can, as commonly seen, the process seems to be complicated,
however
, every stage is necessary.
Firstly
, hand picking at an apple orchard is the first step to
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the fruit to the factory,
secondly
, the raw materials are on the way to
office
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,
then
, they will go through
washing
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the washing
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machine, in the next stage, those will be checked if the quality is good, and the good
are
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stored in the cold temperature, under 20 celsius, in order to maintain the condition. After that, they will be put on the scale to measure
the
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weight and grade, afterwards, the peels must be stripped and sliced into small pieces to be put in the can easily,
besides
that, they will be contained in the can to release some substances to make them tastier.
The next step is
to sterilize to ensure that the eaters will be safe after eating and
this
step indicates realising about consumers' safety, each can is labelled and kept in the storage properly, and eventually, apples are ready to be exported to the branches throughout the country.
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