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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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nuber
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number
 of
consuption
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consumption
 of
fish
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 and different
kids
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kinds
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 of meat namely
fish
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lamb
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beef
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 and
chicken
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 in European
betwen
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between
 1979 and 2004 year.
Overall
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 the number of
fish
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 and
diffrent
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different
kids
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kinds
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 of meat in
Europeon
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European
 country showed
chicken
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 and
beef
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simillar
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similar
 rising trends
whereas
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 that of
fish
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 saw small with
chicken
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 having the biggest .
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that showed
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shows
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chicken
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 average
rising
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rose
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 180
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1979.
Beef
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 sharp rising 230
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degrees
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degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 1979.
Lamb
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 a little bit
fall
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 70
degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 1979.
Fish
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 very
drop
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 51
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1979.
Chicken
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 minimal rising 150
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degrees
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degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 1984.
Beef
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 sharply
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drop
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dropped
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 190
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1984.
Lamb
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a
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apply
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dramatcly
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dramatically
dramatic
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drop
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dropped
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 80
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1984 .
Fish
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 didn't change 50
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1984 .
Chicken
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 significantly rose 152
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consuption
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consumption
 in 1989 .
Beef
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 minimal rising 190
degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 1989 .
Lamb
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 stably
rising
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rose
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 130
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1989.
Fish
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a
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apply
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dramatcly
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dramatically
dropt
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drop
 50
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1989.
Chicken
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steady
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steadily
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 rising 130
degreе
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degrees
 of
consumption
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 in 1994.
Beef
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 minimal
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fall
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fell
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136
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by 136
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1994.
Lamb
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fall
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fell
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 80
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degree
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degrees
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 in 1994.
Fish
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 a gradual
drop
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 48
degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 1994 .
Chicken
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 significantly rose
200
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by 200
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consuption
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consumption
 in 1999.
Beef
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 a sharply
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fall
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fell
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150
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by 150
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degree
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degrees
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 of
consumption
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 in 1999 .
Lamb
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 slowly
dropt
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dropped
60
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degree
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degrees
show examples
 of
consumption
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 in 1999.
Fish
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 didn't change 50
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degree
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degrees
show examples
 of
consumption
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 in 1999. There was a rain
chicken
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 and
Beef
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 of 250 and 180
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degree
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degrees
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respivtively
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respectively
 in 2004 .
Lamb
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 minimal rising 80
degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 2004 .
Fish
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 didn't change 50
degree
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 of
consumption
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 in 2004
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, lamb, beef, chicken, degree, consumption, fall, drop with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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